Kaimani Posted November 30, 2007 Share Posted November 30, 2007 i have an admiration for poets that boeders on idolatry, and apologise to all and any poets on the forum and beyond for soiling on your art. This is my attempt at it. Though i know it falls far short of being a 'poem' I hope you get the sentiment. I perfomed it at one Words aloud, but my perfomance leaves a lot to be desired. anyway, here goes. Gaia's requiem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coyleys Posted December 1, 2007 Share Posted December 1, 2007 Mmmmm! This looks good, I’ll have to read it a couple of times before I comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saff Posted December 3, 2007 Share Posted December 3, 2007 I really like the message, it does feel like people are waiting for something terrible to happen before they're willing to do anything to help and even then would probably just shrug! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted December 3, 2007 Share Posted December 3, 2007 Wonderful. Your best writing yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Malanimal Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 Looks like a poem to me and a good one at that! We are, as a species, a bit dense when it comes to thinking about consequences and what actions we should take. Reminders like this are always welcome, although IMHO the conclusion should be We need… …a different way of thinking? But perhaps I'm a hopeless optimist... Cheers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaimani Posted December 6, 2007 Author Share Posted December 6, 2007 Looks like a poem to me and a good one at that! We are, as a species, a bit dense when it comes to thinking about consequences and what actions we should take. Reminders like this are always welcome, although IMHO the conclusion should be We need… …a different way of thinking? But perhaps I'm a hopeless optimist... Cheers. i know. the ending is a little-well, a lot-weak. had 'we cant eat money.' but thought too corny. then chose worse!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 i know. the ending is a little-well, a lot-weak. had 'we cant eat money.' but thought too corny. then chose worse!!!! Stick at it Kaimani. You improve all the time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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