Chris1985 Posted December 4, 2007 Share Posted December 4, 2007 A cosmopolitan migraine, engines choke my head, i cough blackened fumes, eyes are blinded by the flash's beaming off grey's and browns, where are the birds? the singing has departed, the grass is blurry compared to the curb, leaves replaced by chimneys, trees by man made prisons, where has nature gone? Shunned into exile to be the borders for the concrete gods, the singing is still there... faint.. haunting... what have we done? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted December 4, 2007 Share Posted December 4, 2007 You know some of the poems on here are better than the published ones. Very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaimani Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 beautiful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 beautiful. Yes, only two of us have read it. It deserves a better audience than this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moonbird Posted December 5, 2007 Share Posted December 5, 2007 Thats a great poem Chris keep em coming Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coyleys Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 Nice one Chris, Keep'em coming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted December 6, 2007 Share Posted December 6, 2007 You see Chris Im bumping the thread up for you.! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chris1985 Posted December 6, 2007 Author Share Posted December 6, 2007 hehe, yes i noticed. My poetry may be a desired taste maybe? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moonbird Posted December 7, 2007 Share Posted December 7, 2007 Well all poetry is personal to the writer, and it appeals to certain readers at certain times, it will never appeal to everyone all of the time by its very nature. But I think that your poem is good, as do others obviously, why don't you post some more then people will have a better idea of your work. Also there does not seem to be so many posters in this group as some of the others, though I may be wrong (please don't beat me writers group ), don't get disheartened Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chris1985 Posted December 7, 2007 Author Share Posted December 7, 2007 Post more poems.....mmmmmm this one was the 'city depression', all we ever see is greys and browns, the odd tree being massacred by the council chainsaws doesnt really count to me when i daydream of basic living,to be the way we was meant to be before all these concrete cattle pens came. Prolly got too much time on my hands Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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