coyleys Posted January 21, 2009 Share Posted January 21, 2009 Yet again, apologies for being a bit elusive lately, but it has been a busy couple of months. Anyway, I have had a go at this month’s theme; I think it fits the criteria, so you are all invited to read, digest and pick it to bits. You can be pedantic on this one. Bain sult as. http://sheffieldwriters.ath.cx/SFStoryArchive/1232579860.doc Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ron Blanco Posted January 22, 2009 Share Posted January 22, 2009 Very atmospheric, Coyleys, and ultimately very entertaining too. I particularly liked this line: "His father had been selected for forced labour down the coal mines of Europe." First time through that was a heart-breaking moment, whereas second time through it was a real gas! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coyleys Posted January 22, 2009 Author Share Posted January 22, 2009 Thanks Ron, Glad you liked it. What I would like to know (without giving the story away) is did you twig on before the punch line? If so at what point. Thanks again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ron Blanco Posted January 22, 2009 Share Posted January 22, 2009 did you twig on before the punch line? Hi Coyleys, No, I didn't twig until the very end... but then I am very slow (and gullible). I suppose from your previous stories I should have expected something mischievous. It was remarkable how reading it through the second time was like reading a new story. I loved it. Masterful, Coyleys, masterful Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hopman Posted January 23, 2009 Share Posted January 23, 2009 I enjoyed this story but I admit I had worked out the scene quite quickly. It is a hideous crime that you've depicted - in some parts of the world one can expect multiple life sentences for serincide, I believe. But don't get me started on the pussyfooting of the authorities regarding such crimes. Bring back the... Sorry, I must go and lie down... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tallyman Posted January 24, 2009 Share Posted January 24, 2009 Coyleys, I enjoyed this a great deal and, no, I honestly didn't get the real gist of the story until the very end, so congratulations for that! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nerd Posted January 24, 2009 Share Posted January 24, 2009 I liked this. I am just trying to work out how to upload my first attempt on here... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
olliefrancis Posted January 26, 2009 Share Posted January 26, 2009 Wonderful. I love the comical ending! Laught out loud moment. Well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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