Hopman Posted July 7, 2009 Share Posted July 7, 2009 Owing to a technical hitch this story has had to be reposted My latest offering: A question of political identity. Enjoy! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mantaspook Posted July 7, 2009 Share Posted July 7, 2009 Owing to a technical hitch… TRANSLATION: Mantaspook pressed the wrong button - sorry about that once again, Hopman. I liked this story, it's quite funny and I only realised towards the end who the mysterious man was. Doh! I think I need more coffee… There are some good topical jokes in there but my favourite section was when he tried to phone the office and the TV kept changing channels. Glad to see you opted for subtlety, I would have gone for the obvious 'Blackadder' joke when the chancellor phones "Oh Hello Darling….No I haven't seen your calculator…can't you borrow Peters?...what do you mean 'he won't play?' "etc. Or the waiter greeting Lionel Blair and 'Broon' diving under the table. Or the waiter offering him a sherry (Cherie) prior to been turned into a pillar of salt. With a bit of polishing, perhaps making the policeman's tone more 'official', I could imagine reading something like this in the police review magazine. Very enjoyable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coyleys Posted July 22, 2009 Share Posted July 22, 2009 Nice one Hopman, I like the innuendos, it keeps the old grey matter active, . I think the only line I would change is... If all that copro should fall into the wrong hands, and the press get their teeth into it, why, there’ll be a lot of people with egg on their faces.” To... If all that copro should fall into the wrong hands, and the press get their teeth into it, then the s*** will hit the fan. Great stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hopman Posted July 24, 2009 Author Share Posted July 24, 2009 If all that copro should fall into the wrong hands, and the press get their teeth into it, why, there’ll be a lot of people with egg on their faces.” To... If all that copro should fall into the wrong hands, and the press get their teeth into it, then the s*** will hit the fan. Thank you for your comments. The idea of the "egg on face" was to continue the references to body parts (hands..teeth...faces) and reinforce the previous references. I am sure there is a technical term for this triplet technique. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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