silent angel Posted March 5, 2011 Share Posted March 5, 2011 A venomous vandle. everyday im learnin writing so hard finger tips are burnin theirs so much cash i shud be earnin the anger brings bad things back from ashes with a venomous rage in my face it slashes in the the back of my mind it stashes all the bad memories then dashes now its been lurking there for ages releasing the venom in small stages all around my mind there are smashed cages sanity and rage making wagers release these lyrics on a4 pages smashing down the walls is a very small vandle to many walls for this head to handle my mind is melting like the bottom of a candle im at the mercy of the venomous vandle. by Simon let me know what you think of this lyric its my sons i've put it on for him Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ian Rivedon Posted March 5, 2011 Share Posted March 5, 2011 Simon, Just like when a brand new candle is ignited, the flame flickers with indecision before deciding whether it will continue, or just die in a puff of smoke. With encouragement and willpower, the flame flourishes and continues to enlighten for as long as the laws of physics allow. So, in the same way, anyone who has the inclination to express his thoughts in poetry be encouraged. I read it with enjoyment. From a single spark! IR 05/03/11 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grandad.Malky Posted March 5, 2011 Share Posted March 5, 2011 Interesting ………. I don’t know if it’s a good idea to but his name on here though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silent angel Posted March 5, 2011 Author Share Posted March 5, 2011 he just puts his name to all is poems why is it a bad thing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grandad.Malky Posted March 5, 2011 Share Posted March 5, 2011 he just puts his name to all is poems why is it a bad thing Are you happy with his full name being on the forum? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silent angel Posted March 5, 2011 Author Share Posted March 5, 2011 Are you happy with his full name being on the forum? ok point taken just worried about people copying his poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted March 5, 2011 Share Posted March 5, 2011 This could be put to a rap tune. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
silent angel Posted March 5, 2011 Author Share Posted March 5, 2011 This could be put to a rap tune. thank you Pattricia he's had lots of different lyrics he wants to become a lyasist (sorry spelling) & doesn't know who to contact Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Geza Posted March 6, 2011 Share Posted March 6, 2011 Hi silent Angel, I wouldn't know who to contact either. Another great poem though- very strong imagery. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
maidinsheff Posted March 7, 2011 Share Posted March 7, 2011 What is a 'vandle'? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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