Karis Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 I would still reduce the word content of both by at LEAST 30% and strive to make them considerably less verbose. You have to remember you only get a few fleeting seconds of someone's time to make it to the next stage and any potential employer is looking for any excuse to ditch your application in favour of the other six hundred they may have received. I've also got to agree with TJC's comments: everyone's heard the same personal hyperbole a thousand times. In return, you could perhaps add one single statement that dynamically sets you apart from others with an achievement that's directly related to the job you're applying for! Don't give them the opportunity to dismiss you. If in doubt, keep it really simple! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Marx Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 Your construct is terrible. I woudn't go anywhere near you and I have employed a good few people in my time. That could be my loss but I doubt it somehow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
denlin Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 I'm with Karis, your covering letter still makes you seem full of yourself, there is a fine line between confidence and arrogance. Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to be considered for any customer facing positions you may have in store, for Part-Time work on a permanent basis. I am hard working, reliable and concientious, eager to learn new skills and I get on well with people at all levels. I enclose a copy of my Curriculum Vitae for your perusal. I am available for interview at any time and I look forward to hearing from you. . Yours xxxxxxx ENC Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karis Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 I am writing to you to be considered for any customer facing positions you may have in store, for Part-Time work on a permanent basis. I am hard working, reliable and conscientious, eager to learn new skills and I get on well with people at all levels. I enclose a copy of my Curriculum Vitae for your perusal. I am available for interview at any time and I look forward to hearing from you. This is perfect, although I'd personally remove "I am hard working, reliable and conscientious, eager to learn new skills and I get on well with people at all levels" and possibly replace it with something directly related to the job in question! But otherwise exactly what you want to say Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
denlin Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 This is perfect, although I'd personally remove "I am hard working, reliable and conscientious, eager to learn new skills and I get on well with people at all levels" and possibly replace it with something directly related to the job in question! But otherwise exactly what you want to say Sorry Karis I meant to say that was a spec approach, for advertised vacancy you are quite right. It seldom failed to get me interview when I was looking for work and the CV and you selling yourself does the rest. Thankfully it's 9 years since I needed to look for work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Karis Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 Sorry Karis I meant to say that was a spec approach, for advertised vacancy you are quite right. It seldom failed to get me interview when I was looking for work and the CV and you selling yourself does the rest. Thankfully it's 9 years since I needed to look for work. Yep. You're totally right. I was trying to be (overly) helpful and completely forgot that was the non-spec application! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BEDROCK Posted March 3, 2013 Author Share Posted March 3, 2013 Your construct is terrible. I woudn't go anywhere near you and I have employed a good few people in my time. That could be my loss but I doubt it somehow. Well to be honest, why reply then, I am not a rocket scientist! ---------- Post added 03-03-2013 at 22:47 ---------- I'm with Karis, your covering letter still makes you seem full of yourself, there is a fine line between confidence and arrogance. Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to be considered for any customer facing positions you may have in store, for Part-Time work on a permanent basis. I am hard working, reliable and concientious, eager to learn new skills and I get on well with people at all levels. I enclose a copy of my Curriculum Vitae for your perusal. I am available for interview at any time and I look forward to hearing from you. . Yours xxxxxxx ENC That is rather brief, would sending that as a Spec Letter look like I had not made any effort? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gym_rat Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 That is rather brief, would sending that as a Spec Letter look like I had not made any effort? that letter will get you an interview, your letter will not - clear enough for you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
smithy266 Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 Yep, as they say, but I would also try and find the name of the person to who you are writing, instead of 'Sir or Madam' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gym_rat Posted March 3, 2013 Share Posted March 3, 2013 I would loose half the guff in the CV too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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