scribe Posted April 23, 2007 Share Posted April 23, 2007 I was really tempted In response to my money letter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted April 23, 2007 Share Posted April 23, 2007 Dear old Ronnie Biggs. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
scribe Posted April 23, 2007 Author Share Posted April 23, 2007 Dear old Ronnie Biggs. What are you doing up so late in the evening ?,you should be in bed !!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted April 23, 2007 Share Posted April 23, 2007 What are you doing up so late in the evening ?,you should be in bed !!!!!!!!!! But enough of me, lets talk about you. What do you think of me ? :hihi: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mantaspook Posted April 26, 2007 Share Posted April 26, 2007 Nice one Scribe, two suggestions that may improve the story, you don’t have to explain that the letter writer was residing in Brazil / in exile / extended holiday etc. It may have been more subtle to put something like “We may have met on my recent holiday to Brazil…” I think most people would ‘get’ this. Also this line “but at the moment I am a bit tied up with her Majesty.” needs moving to the last paragraph as it gives the game away a little early, an alternative line could be “I regret to inform you that my time is rather limited due to the stringent requirements of my mail-bag production business and is likely to continue this way for the foreseeable future…” Or until someone smuggles in another rope ladder. Good story sir! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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