Story: 'Trapped facing the dragon.'

[Hopman]

Here's my attempt at starting the ball(point) rolling for May's topic.

 

Trapped facing the dragon.

 

Possibly not the most obvious interpretation of the theme. Anyway, see what you think.

[sauerkraut]

Well done Hopman for making a start. A nice twist on the theme!

 

I'm still clueless

[coyleys]

Nicely wrote Hopman

You are quite good with your descriptive powers, though I had to read it twice to get the gist.

I will comment more when more people have had a read.

Nice one.

[pattricia]

Nice one, I love the ending.

[scribe]

Yep your of to a flying start with that piece ,liked it ,fit's the brief .

[redrobbo]

I didn't get a sense of N being trapped. The story, for me, only gave a sense of the stage fright that N suffered. Also, I found the use of the letter "N" for the character detracted from my reading this story. Why not a real name?

 

I read this story a couple of days ago, but have returned to it again tonight to see if a re-reading would assist me in gaining a sense of the theme - trapped - but it was still absent.

 

Maybe if you could expanded on the thought processes of N a little more, developing the theme that N was trapped, e.g., that N felt he could neither step onto that stage, nor run away. That would helped me feel a tension building up - wondering whether N would respond to the prompter's cue that he was to enter stage left, or whether he would freeze on the spot, impervious to the prompter's increasingly frantic cues.