mikomi Posted May 10, 2007 Share Posted May 10, 2007 Why Me? Trapped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pattricia Posted May 10, 2007 Share Posted May 10, 2007 Is it fiction ? Im sure it is. Its very good anyway,mikomi. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
redrobbo Posted May 10, 2007 Share Posted May 10, 2007 That's a very disturbing read mikomi. Phew! It captures well the feeling of being trapped in a malfunctioning body, and the total reliance on others for your care. The anger and frustration is expressed with a mixture of black humour. I'm going to look for the whiskey bottle now, as I need a stiff drink (no pun intended!). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shoeshine Posted May 11, 2007 Share Posted May 11, 2007 That's a very powerful piece of writing, mikomi. The anger of the man's predicament screams out at the reader. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coyleys Posted May 11, 2007 Share Posted May 11, 2007 Wrote with a lot of feeling Mikomi. We have some competition on our hands with this one. If I may digress as I get on my soapbox… Every morning while driving to work, at the same point and time I pass a few youths, can of extra strong brew in hand and what looks like a splif in the other, slagging off the passers bye and I think what a waste, the only thing they are good at is signing the benefit form and knocking out kids for more benefit, a total burden to society, and then I think “if I ruled the world” apart the obvious; bring back the birch or conscription, each one of those youths could give a decent life to someone like your fictional character with their body parts, you get my drift? It’s a good job we don’t have totalitarian rule and I was the ruler or morally I would be no better than they are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mikomi Posted May 12, 2007 Author Share Posted May 12, 2007 Thank you all for your comments, there really appreciated . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sauerkraut Posted May 23, 2007 Share Posted May 23, 2007 Sorry it's taken me so long to read and comment Your piece made me think of Professor Stephen Hawking - didn't he once say he wished he'd been aborted? I'm very impressed at how you've managed to get inside the mind of your character and express his anger and frustration. A harrowing read! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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