Story: 'Trapped.'

[coyleys]

Hi Mantas.

 

Glad you liked it, and yep you got the oxymoron, I did like your oxy-moron pun at the end.

 

Here’s a Mantaspook improvement checklist (you should be used to this by now!)

Yep! I’m used to them by now and they are most welcome and appreciated thanks.

 

 

(Comments 1 and 2) Yep! I agree “A bit messy” I’ll rework it, with the exception of “smooth wooden surface and in a coffin” at that point Jacob only assumed he was in a coffin, he was actually in the fridge, hence the something hard and cold. Also I didn’t want to give the plot away too early.

 

(Comment 4) yep! Agree again, Mrs Dilber was an after thought, when making the names Dickensian.

 

Thanks again, Mantas and all whom suggested corrections. (bang goes the gold star)